Great quality video. Your eye contact was on point and you talked slowly enough to where I was fully able to hear and comprehend your talking points. I do believe there is an epidemic in todays world with illegal shark poaching that is decreasing the shark population at a rapid rate. I would just be curious on how your company would turn a profit or become sustainable without a secure source of revenue. Also, your pitch did sound a bit rehearsed. I would attempt to explain your idea with your heart and passion so it comes off more genuine.
I love the enthusiasm in this video! You were passionate about the subject and spoke very clearly. I also believe a shark education program is necessary. People fear sharks in spite of the fact that they rarely injure or kill humans. I like how you talked about how online school is becoming more popular and that this program may appeal to these online students.. Maybe there could also be an online component to this shark education program. Great video!
I think your elevator pitch went very well because you were able to illustrate your ideas and your product in a way I could understand with compelling statistics and facts. You also looked very comfortable while delivering your pitch and maintained a high amount of enthusiasm throughout. Additionally, you finished the pitched up nice with a good closing.
The way you were able to capture in audience from the moment you began speaking is crucial to this elevator pitch. You have the passion for this subject and it was shown in your pitch. The facts and examples were able to pull the audience in to want to either become more informed or get involved. Great pitch!
Shark education is something often overlooked especially in the target market of South Florida. To fill the need is crucial and this pitch proves the market and idea can mesh cohesively.
Hi Jillian,
ReplyDeleteGreat quality video. Your eye contact was on point and you talked slowly enough to where I was fully able to hear and comprehend your talking points. I do believe there is an epidemic in todays world with illegal shark poaching that is decreasing the shark population at a rapid rate. I would just be curious on how your company would turn a profit or become sustainable without a secure source of revenue. Also, your pitch did sound a bit rehearsed. I would attempt to explain your idea with your heart and passion so it comes off more genuine.
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Good points. Thanks for taking the time to share.
DeleteI love the enthusiasm in this video! You were passionate about the subject and spoke very clearly. I also believe a shark education program is necessary. People fear sharks in spite of the fact that they rarely injure or kill humans. I like how you talked about how online school is becoming more popular and that this program may appeal to these online students.. Maybe there could also be an online component to this shark education program. Great video!
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ReplyDeleteHey Jillian,
I think your elevator pitch went very well because you were able to illustrate your ideas and your product in a way I could understand with compelling statistics and facts. You also looked very comfortable while delivering your pitch and maintained a high amount of enthusiasm throughout. Additionally, you finished the pitched up nice with a good closing.
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DeleteThe way you were able to capture in audience from the moment you began speaking is crucial to this elevator pitch. You have the passion for this subject and it was shown in your pitch. The facts and examples were able to pull the audience in to want to either become more informed or get involved. Great pitch!
ReplyDeleteShark education is something often overlooked especially in the target market of South Florida. To fill the need is crucial and this pitch proves the market and idea can mesh cohesively.
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